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It's a great entry, Lilyy - and a quick, intriguing read. ^_^ I'll critique it in full, before long; but at the moment, I hope you'll accept my thanks for ...

'Lo CL! ...I've wanted to remark on Guttersnipe for some time. I haven't caught anything much but typos. I've always enjoyed your writing; and the introduction to this, with Regan ...

You've taken rather the monologue tack here - which can be apt for tone and voice - but it still has to have more than simply that. At this point, ...

Hello Anna; welcome to YWS! This is, actually, the forum for introducing yourself...and I assume you're not a pineapple or a fellow greeting one. ^_~ If you'd like, I can ...

Firstly, Jig, this was solidly chilling - a heavy, consistent sense of its frame like the painting. Once you start reading, you're in. There can't be a much better definition ...

Hello Gyr!... No line by line from the Imp at present for various reasons - though highest on the list would be time constraint. ^_^ Rather, I'm going to go ...

One more remark here that 1) does not directly apply to the piece of writing or 2) attempt to clarify the meaning of a given critique without sinking to the ...

'Tis DD's entry! (You see, I had said you'd manage to get it in. ^_^) My duty, naturally, to read and critique the entries for the Duel. I very much ...

An American publisher, I suppose... Power Glide thought up by Dr. Blair - I believe he designed immersion courses for US military and CIA. And I think you can get ...

Ah well, you have a fragment of a point, Snoink, in your blog. o.0 I remember reading in a science magazine that scientists studying Creation were debating whether our universe ...

Hello bubbles. The poem is a place. But as good poetry, thoughtful, ought, it has layers - and the description of the land, allusive to myth and history, makes what ...

'Lo Sureal. Simply, sentence structurally and line by line, first. Not everything you've written sticks so firmly to structure similarity/repetition - though you have a great aptitude for putting thin

As has been noted before, doubtless, a piece of poetry or fiction is not an excuse or a place to debate each other's critiques. Critique the work . Any more ...

Oh, 'tis a good read...and I hadn't expected ghosts. You have a way with description that keeps it present and poetic, brushing abstract without fading into it. Which means I'll ...

Hello there Pie -- You're rushing like a madman through the entire thing. Dialogue, brief action - there, you've got notes or filled-out outlining of a story. But what's a ...